Documentary: First Script Draft



Josh was able to meet up with the the Windmill Community Garden's main workers and they became the main characters for our first script. He had an interview with them , transcribed it in order to  create a draft structure and script for our documentary. I was happy with the structure.

 Draft Script

  




Some of the feedback that was received;

- The problem was introduced too early
- Change the order so that Jamie (one of our characters) is introduced right at the start
- Think about using the location to help set the story up
- Think about what the ending might be: positive? negative?
- Try to find some more contacts
- Think about visuals as well as audio, not just audio

 as you can see, the area for visuals in the draft script was empty so now I know that even when doing a first draft script, its important to always have visual references. Our next step would be discussing the overall outline of the documentary and making sure we fix all of the problems Helen brought to our attention.







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